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Fundraising Tuesday: Remember the Postscript. Donors Do!

February 13, 2018 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

Surprising but true: without a good postscript, your donors may not even read your nonprofit’s appeal letter. And that would be a shame.

How a Postscript Says “Read This Letter”

Postscript to fundraising appeal

The p.s. is the second thing donors read–after their own name!

Very few of us read a letter from top to bottom, in order.

  • First, the envelope helps us decide whether to open and read it at all.
  • Second, the salutation draws us in or pushes us away.
  • Images, captions, and subheadings all catch the eye before we ever look at the main text of the letter.

Above all (or below all!), the postscript grabs the reader’s attention. Direct mail expert Gary Henricksen quotes research that tells us:

Over 90 percent of readers read the PS before the letter. It is the first paragraph, not the last. Share on X

Postscripts Raise Money

It stands to reason that the p.s.helps your nonprofit get more donations. After all, how many donors are going to pitch your letter in the recycling bin and still give you money? But don’t take it from me. Ask the experts.

Decades of eye motion studies have shown that the first two things readers look at when opening a letter are their name and the postscript. –John Killoran

A donor reading a P.S. is a donor looking for information. And that’s your opportunity. –Alan Sharpe

In direct mail (and sometimes email), the PS is the most important thing you write. It’s one of the most-read parts of your message. It’s worth spending some time on to make it really sing. –Jeff Brooks

The P.S. gives you a chance to reinforce your message and include a strong call to action right above the reply device. –Emily Hunsaker

So craft a postscript with

  1. What you’re asking people to give to
  2. How much you’re asking them to give
  3. And a deadline for when that gift should be given –Marc Pitman

Remember:  A good PS offers some or all of the following:

  • A sense of urgency
  • Appreciation
  • A tangible way to help
  • A specific amount of money to give
  • An ask for monthly giving
  • A limited time opportunity –Rebecca H. Davis

Why Aren’t You Writing a Postscript?

There are all these reasons for including a p.s. with every fundraising letter, and very few reasons not to.  So I’m glad to say that out of the 72 nonprofit organizations who sent me a year-end appeal, most of them (39) included a postscript.

Some of them chose to reinforce the message “Give now.” They said just that, “Give today”–or they gave me a link so I could donate online, immediately, instead of putting their letter into the pile.

Some of them gave me a tangible reason to give. They offered to send me a premium if I made my donation before the end of the year, or they appealed to my generosity by telling me my gift would be matched two or three times.

Some told me I would make a difference. Some asked me, “Do you want to accomplish” some amazing result–and urged me to answer “Yes!”

You can find samples of great postscripts just by clicking the links in this post. If you feel creative, great: write your own! But being original is not important. Capturing the reader’s attention while you have it, is.

P.S. Don’t Miss Your Chance to Get More Gifts!

If you are like the 33 other nonprofits who asked me for money at the end of 2017–the one who didn’t include a postscript–you may have missed your chance.

“May have.” Perhaps you’ve done the research, and your particular set of donors is unlike the vast majority. Maybe they read every word. Maybe they find a p.s. annoying. And maybe they are so loyal that they will give to your organization no matter what you send.

I wouldn’t bet on it.

And that is what you’re doing if you don’t include a P.S. in your fundraising appeal. You are betting the financial success of your organization on the hope that your donors are so special, you don’t have to do what works.

And if you’re wrong, some other organization is getting the donations you were hoping the donor would send to you.

Why not try it out? Make this year the year you start using postscripts to get more donations.

 


This is the second of a series about improving your nonprofit’s fundraising appeal letters that will appear on Communicate! throughout the next two months. Next up: the photo.

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Fundraising Tuesday: Greetings and Salutations

January 30, 2018 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

no recyclingWhen you’re sending an appeal letter to a donor, you want them to take the time to read it. Your biggest enemy? The recycling bin. Your biggest ally (once they open the envelope)? The salutation.

Call the donor by name if you want them to read on.

 

Salutations: “Dear Friend” Won’t Do

I was happy to see that out of the 72 nonprofits who sent me appeal letters in November or December 2017, 52 of them–70%–called me by name.

The names varied. Some used “Dear Dennis,” while others said “Dear Mr. Fischman.” Some addressed themselves to both my wife and me. Very few of them asked me what I preferred to be called, which is what I consider best practice. But all 52 started off on the right foot, because they wrote to me personally.

That means that the 15 nonprofits that wrote to “Dear Friend” fell behind, from the opening line of their appeal letter.

How to Create a Personal Salutation

I forgot your nameAs fundraising expert Gail Perry points out, “Your donor expects that you know her name and who she is, since she’s been sending you money for a while!” To meet that expectation, you have to ask what she or he or they like to be called (and you could find out their preferred pronoun at the same time).

Once you’ve asked, of course, you have to remember. You can use the greeting the donor prefers only if you keep good records.

This is where a donor database, or even better, a constituent relationship management system (CRM), is worth every penny you spend on it. It is time-consuming to use spreadsheets and merge fields to call people by name, but if you have a CRM, it’s simple.

Our friends at Capterra have published reviews of many of the best fundraising software, including CRM systems. It would be worth your while to make 2018 the year you get a tool that will let you be more personal with your donor. Keep your appeal letter out of the recycling bin!

 


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The Envelope, Please! Fundraising Tuesday for Nonprofits

January 23, 2018 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

Nonprofit envelopeWhat can you learn by reading other nonprofits’ mail? During the last two months of 2017, I received 136 appeal letters from 72 different nonprofit organizations. I read them all (so you don’t have to!) And I learned quite a bit about what you can do to get more supporters to open your mail, read it, and donate. Today: the envelope.

Why Pay Attention to the Envelope?

To quote expert copywriter Alan Sharpe, “Your envelope serves two functions and two alone:

  1. Deliver your appeal to your donor
  2. Persuade your donor to open and read your letter.”

It doesn’t matter how well you write the letter, or what a compelling story you include, or how the photo tugs at the heartstrings, or even how personal you make your appeal if the donor never sees it.

What if your beautiful letter goes straight to the recycling bin, unopened? That would be such a shame! And if your donor is getting 136 appeal letters in a two-month period like I did, that is what is going to happen–unless you do something to make your envelope leap out of the pile.

What Makes for a Good Envelope?

17 of the 72 organizations that asked me for money in the last two months did not use the envelope to win my interest at all. They printed their return address on the upper left-hand corner, so I could tell who was sending me the letter. Apparently, they thought that was enough. Other nonprofits–their competition–did better.

28 of the 72 organizations actively bid for my attention.

  • Some included a logo or a tag line in their return address, to remind me who they were and why I should care.
  • Some used an envelope of an unusual size or color. Yes, that can work! When the Special Olympics increased its format from a 6-inch by 4-inch package to a 7.25-inch by 5.25-inch package, its response rate jumped nearly 10 percent, Bryan Terpstra of direct response fundraising agency RobbinsKersten Direct said.
  • Some printed a generic message like “You can make the difference!” on the envelope. (And I give them more credit than the ones who printed “Year-end appeal enclosed.” Why would I, the donor, care about that?)

27 of the 72 nonprofits went the extra mile to make sure the donor had to open the mail. Besides logos, tag lines, envelope color and size, they also used:

  • Attention-grabbing photos
  • Messages that conveyed urgency
  • Personal appeals

On the envelope you see in the photo, CISPES used a mix of these techniques. “We’ve missed you!” makes me feel they’ve noticed me personally. I am much more likely to open that envelope than the one that says “Give today” (or the one that says nothing at all).

What to Do First

Once you get started, you can think of many creative ways to signal to your donor, “You’ve got to read this!” Alan Sharpe lists a baker’s dozen of them, from using both sides of the envelope to promising a benefit to the donor.

Let’s be real, however. Most nonprofit organizations are small, with limited budgets to spend (even though we know you have to spend money to make money). You are not going to do everything that would entice your donor all at once, in your next mailing. What changes should you make first?

I would agree with Gail Perry that these three steps will help you raise more money, all by themselves:

  • Make it stand out (use a size of envelope you haven’t used before, or try a different colour of envelope).
  • Use a first class stamp (instead of bulk postage).
  • Hand address the envelope.

Yes, all these things take time, or money, or both. “In the nonprofit sector there’s an obsession about fundraising’s cost—as opposed to its cost-effectiveness,” says fundraising guru Mal Warwick. If you want to succeed, plan on spending the time and money to get a better result.

Because your appeal letter is too important to end up in the recycling bin.

 


This is the first of a series about improving your nonprofit’s fundraising appeal letters that will appear on Communicate! throughout the next two months. Next up: the greeting, or salutation.

 

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