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Fundraising Tuesday: Appeal Letters, Easy to Read

June 30, 2020 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

wall-of-text

Are your fundraising appeal letters easy to read? If not, all the work you put into choosing the right words may be wasted. (As in, tossed into the trash, unread.)

Let’s say you’ve done what it takes to persuade your potential donor to open the envelope. You’ve called them by the name they like to be called by, and you’ve written a P.S. that makes them want to go back and read your message. You’ve even included some excellent photos that go a long way toward telling the story.

And then they look at the language of your appeal letter, and it’s a solid wall of text. Into the trash it goes! (If they’re conscientious, into the recycling!)

What You Can Do to Make Letters Easy to Read

White space

white spaceBefore & After Magazine’s John McWade describes white space as no less than a “zone of silence”–and that’s a good thing!

White space gives your readers a break from the printed word, allowing them to rest their eyes, and making them more likely to continue reading. (And that’s what you want, right?)

Lisa Sargent gives five easy and powerful ways to use white space in your fundraising appeals:

  1. Use reasonable page margins (at least one inch, right and left).
  2. Write short, indented paragraphs and leave a blank line between them.
  3. Leave plenty of space for your signature.
  4. For longer letters, use subheads.
  5. Indent quotations.

Font

Why should you care about something seemingly trivial like the font your letter is printed in? Well, Colin Wheildon, author of Type & Layout: Are You Communicating or Just Making Pretty Shapes?, says:

It’s possible to blow away three-quarters of our readers simply by choosing the wrong [font]. If you rely on words to sell, that should concern you deeply.

Kathie Kramer Ryan of Arroyo Fundraising Fluency advises:

  • Use serif font for print and sans serif for online.
  • Use at least 12-point font for older eyes. (I would say 14!)
  • Don’t let designers dictate the look of your fundraising letter. Choose a font that invites your audience in.

Serif and sans serif fontsUnderlining, bold, and italics

The late, legendary fundraiser Mal Warwick counsels you:

Let’s assume you’ve decided that subheads are inappropriate for the appeal you’re writing… There’s still an easy way for you to accent the benefits offered in your appeal, answer readers’ unspoken questions, and make your letter easier to read: by underlining. Do it sparingly. Choose only a few key words and phrases. But, if possible, choose them before you write the body of the letter!

Why should you choose the words to emphasize even before you write the letter?

Because it helps you decide what the letter is really about.

Because it helps you remember what the letter is really about.

Because it helps you communicate what the letter is really about to your donors–and it forces you to ask, “And why does that matter to the person I’m asking to give?”

You should pay attention to white space, font size and shape, underlining, bold, and italics for the same reason you pay attention to your donors. Share on X

By making your appeal letters easy to read, you show them you care–and make it easy for them to see why they should give.

 

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The Envelope, Please! Fundraising Tuesday for Nonprofits

January 23, 2018 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

Nonprofit envelopeWhat can you learn by reading other nonprofits’ mail? During the last two months of 2017, I received 136 appeal letters from 72 different nonprofit organizations. I read them all (so you don’t have to!) And I learned quite a bit about what you can do to get more supporters to open your mail, read it, and donate. Today: the envelope.

Why Pay Attention to the Envelope?

To quote expert copywriter Alan Sharpe, “Your envelope serves two functions and two alone:

  1. Deliver your appeal to your donor
  2. Persuade your donor to open and read your letter.”

It doesn’t matter how well you write the letter, or what a compelling story you include, or how the photo tugs at the heartstrings, or even how personal you make your appeal if the donor never sees it.

What if your beautiful letter goes straight to the recycling bin, unopened? That would be such a shame! And if your donor is getting 136 appeal letters in a two-month period like I did, that is what is going to happen–unless you do something to make your envelope leap out of the pile.

What Makes for a Good Envelope?

17 of the 72 organizations that asked me for money in the last two months did not use the envelope to win my interest at all. They printed their return address on the upper left-hand corner, so I could tell who was sending me the letter. Apparently, they thought that was enough. Other nonprofits–their competition–did better.

28 of the 72 organizations actively bid for my attention.

  • Some included a logo or a tag line in their return address, to remind me who they were and why I should care.
  • Some used an envelope of an unusual size or color. Yes, that can work! When the Special Olympics increased its format from a 6-inch by 4-inch package to a 7.25-inch by 5.25-inch package, its response rate jumped nearly 10 percent, Bryan Terpstra of direct response fundraising agency RobbinsKersten Direct said.
  • Some printed a generic message like “You can make the difference!” on the envelope. (And I give them more credit than the ones who printed “Year-end appeal enclosed.” Why would I, the donor, care about that?)

27 of the 72 nonprofits went the extra mile to make sure the donor had to open the mail. Besides logos, tag lines, envelope color and size, they also used:

  • Attention-grabbing photos
  • Messages that conveyed urgency
  • Personal appeals

On the envelope you see in the photo, CISPES used a mix of these techniques. “We’ve missed you!” makes me feel they’ve noticed me personally. I am much more likely to open that envelope than the one that says “Give today” (or the one that says nothing at all).

What to Do First

Once you get started, you can think of many creative ways to signal to your donor, “You’ve got to read this!” Alan Sharpe lists a baker’s dozen of them, from using both sides of the envelope to promising a benefit to the donor.

Let’s be real, however. Most nonprofit organizations are small, with limited budgets to spend (even though we know you have to spend money to make money). You are not going to do everything that would entice your donor all at once, in your next mailing. What changes should you make first?

I would agree with Gail Perry that these three steps will help you raise more money, all by themselves:

  • Make it stand out (use a size of envelope you haven’t used before, or try a different colour of envelope).
  • Use a first class stamp (instead of bulk postage).
  • Hand address the envelope.

Yes, all these things take time, or money, or both. “In the nonprofit sector there’s an obsession about fundraising’s cost—as opposed to its cost-effectiveness,” says fundraising guru Mal Warwick. If you want to succeed, plan on spending the time and money to get a better result.

Because your appeal letter is too important to end up in the recycling bin.

 


This is the first of a series about improving your nonprofit’s fundraising appeal letters that will appear on Communicate! throughout the next two months. Next up: the greeting, or salutation.

 

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