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TY Thursday: Checklist for Your Ideal TY Letter

August 24, 2017 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

recipe for TY letterOne of the most popular posts on this blog is called The Ideal Thank-You Letter Went Out Today! It lists seven ingredients you need to stir in to your thank-you letter to make sure donors will read it, appreciate it, and remember it when you ask them to give again.

It’s more than halfway through 2017. I’ve made some donations this year, and received some thank-you letters. Here’s how they compare to the ideal, a checklist of all seven points.

1) Called me by name.

Happily, 100% of the TY’s my wife and I received got this right. Nobody said, “Dear friend.” 10% started out “Dear Mr. and Mrs. Fischman,” and another 10% called us by our first names and last name. 80% used our first names, like friends.

2) Confirmed how much I gave you.

Again, 100%. This is progress! But that’s where the good news ends.

3) Told me how my gift would make a difference.

Nearly all the letters bragged about the organization’s work and cast me as a very junior partner. I read a lot of general statements about how the organization couldn’t do its work without me. They were flattering, but not very convincing.

About a third of the letters included statistics about how many people the organization helped–but I know my $50 is not “providing care to 30,000 patients.” So, that statistic doesn’t mean much to me.

One in ten of the letters reminded me of the problem we both worried about and the solution my donation could help provide: in other words, the things that made me want to give to the organization in the first place. Thank you to those who did! You made me feel good about my gift all over again.

Only one in ten really got it right. Those were the nonprofits who drew a direct connection between my gift and a specific result I cared about. Here’s my favorite example, from Wellstone Action:

Every time a Wellstone-trained progressive convenes a press conference in Oregon, or turns hundreds of young people out to vote in Wisconsin, or is elected to public office in rural Idaho, they have you to thank.

4) Illustrated my impact with a story. 

None. Zip. Zilch. Not one of the thank-you letters I received used storytelling to make me feel and remember what my gift accomplished…or why I should I give again.

Nonprofits, I’m disappointed in you! Let me help you figure out how to recognize, collect, recall, and use good stories in your thank-you letters in the future. Sign up for a webinar,  Where’s the Story Here? Nonprofit Storytelling for Fun and Profit.

5) Included a photo or image.

I saw more organizations getting visual in their TY’s this year–but still only 20%. And only half of them used an image to show me the people I’m supporting, and captioned them in their own words. That was what I appreciated most. (I’m talking about you, Interfaith Worker Justice!)

6) Told me about how else I can help.

30% of these letters included the dreaded “thask” (a thank-you and a new “ask” on the same page). And I know some organizations raise more money in the short term with this tactic–but in the long run, you will burn through donors instead of making them loyal friends.

I liked the organizations that gave me a chance to see my money at work as the year goes on, on their websites.But that was about them. What could I do, besides give more money?

The Rosenberg Fund for Children’s Jennifer Meeropol “enclosed a card and sticker for our campaign calling on President Obama to exonerate my grandmother, Ethel Rosenberg. You can learn more and sign & share the petition at www.rfc.org/ethel.” That’s the call to action I’m talking about!

7) Signed it by hand, and wrote something just for me.

All of these thank-you letters included photocopies of a personal signature. As far as I could tell, none of them were actually signed on the spot. That might be too much to expect from a national organization, but if you’re a local organization with a smaller mailing list, this might be your chance to stand out from the crowd!

Only 20% of the organizations had added a personal note to the thank-you letter. This dismays me. Sure, it’s harder to send a TY in a timely manner AND personalize it–but it’s worth doing both. And it gets easier if you have a good donor database and a story bank, right at hand.

Please use this post as your checklist when you thank donors. Get ready now to send out the ideal thank-you letter this year!

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Fundraising Tuesday: Once Upon a Time…

August 22, 2017 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

once upon a timeIt was the midst of the Great Recession, and about one in ten people across the U.S. were out of work. Amadou was one of them.

Unemployment benefits helped his family, for a while. But he had worked for a low wage, and his benefits were only a fraction of that—and then they ran out.

The only thing keeping Amadou, his family, and lot of families in Somerville, Massachusetts from starving was the SNAP program—what we all call “food stamps.”

I knew Amadou. And I knew the anti-poverty agency where I worked was signing people up for food stamps…and saving lives. But how could I show that to our donors?

The answer was storytelling.

Storytelling is the most powerful way to engage the emotions of your donors. As Network for Good tells us,

Donors tend to give twice as much when presented with a story about an affected individual, as opposed to reading huge abstract numbers of the overall scope of a problem.

Find out what kind of stories YOU can tell that will touch your donors’ imaginations and move their hearts. Read Telling Stories that Move Donors to Give, my guest post on FundraisingCoach.com.

Then, you can listen to a Nonprofit Academy webinar that I’ve presented: Where’s the Story? Discovering Stories that Drive Donations. Because a story is more than just one darn thing after another. It’s a gift you can give your donors–and they will give back.

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Who is your nonprofit’s Malala?

August 21, 2017 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

Malala YousafzaiTMichelle Obamaoday’s example of great nonprofit communications comes from someone you might have heard of before: Michelle Obama.

And it’s about another person you might know about: Malala Yousafzai.

The letter

Obama sent the following letter to my friend Carol (and perhaps a few million others).

Twenty years ago today, in a part of Pakistan where women and girls are so often silenced, a girl was born who would one day use her voice to change the world.

Her name is Malala Yousafzai, and she is one of my heroes.

Despite threats from Taliban terrorists who banned girls in her community from attending school, Malala’s father, a teacher, believed that his daughter should get an education. And Malala bravely spoke out about the dangers she faced, writing a blog about her fears that the Taliban would attack her school.

The Taliban sought to retaliate, and in October of 2012, as Malala and her friends were traveling home from school, a gunman stormed their school bus and shot her in the head.

Thankfully, Malala survived, and she refused to be silenced. In the years since, she has traveled the globe, fighting for girls’ education, and she won a Nobel Peace Prize for her extraordinary efforts. She did all of this before even finishing high school — in fact, she graduated just last week!

There are young people like Malala in every corner of the globe who are determined to get an education worthy of their promise. In the new chapter of our lives, Barack and I are committed to doing whatever we can to support these young leaders.

I hope you’ll join me in wishing Malala a happy birthday and in working to ensure that every girl has the chance to fulfill her boundless potential.

— Michelle

Donate today to support the Obama Foundation’s work, including our ongoing investment in young leaders across the globe.

Why the letter works

Notice that the letter says practically nothing about the Obama Foundation, or Michelle, or Barack. It’s all about Malala Yousafzai…and you, the donor.

  • It tells an inspiring story–one that particularly appeals to female donors, like Carol.
  • It ties it to something that’s going on right now: Yousafzai’s bithday and high school graduation. (And just this week, she was accepted at Oxford.)
  • It asks for money. (In the actual email, there’s a “Donate” button right below the postscript.)

You don’t have to be Michelle Obama. Write a letter like this, and it will work for your nonprofit, too.

And you don’t need a world-famous figure, either. Whose story will your audience identify with? Find your Malala, then tell your donors, “Be on her side. Donate.”

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