November kicks off the annual scramble for donations in the U.S. Your mailbox fills up with appeal letters from groups you support (and some you don’t). But do any of them look like this?
Next Step filled their letter to my wife Rona with signs they care about her.
- Calling her by name. (I’m amazed how many groups still use the salutation “Dear Friend.”)
- Creating visual appeal. The photo catches the eye.
- Using a real story. It’s not just a photo: it’s a person, looking you in the eye, telling his story.
- Adding a hand-written note. It’s actually on an orange sticky note, and the content is personalized to Rona.
- Directing her clearly how to give.
All of these elements make the letter vivid, attractive, and appealing. But the most important thing that Next Step did was starting the letter with “You.”
Next Step understands that donors will give if they feel that their donation is doing the good work. As Seth Godin recently wrote, the donor is the hero of the story. That’s why they give.
Now, your letter doesn’t literally have to start with “You.” It would be boring if every letter did! But when you wrote your organization’s annual appeal letter, did you start with the donor? Did you do everything you could do to make them feel the letter was personally written for them? And did you place the donor at the center of the story?
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