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Fundraising Tuesday: The Ideal Email Appeal

January 12, 2021 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

When it comes to raising money, letters in the mail (and thank-you’s in the mail) still rule. But email is coming in a close second.

Part of that is the moment. As I write this, the pandemic is still raging in the United States, and Donald Trump is still President of the United States–and for both those reasons, the post office has been strained beyond belief.

Part of it is generational. There are more donors now who grew up always using email. (Indeed, there are some for whom email is passe, and they will let hundreds of messages pile up in their inbox while at least looking at every text message they receive on their phone.)

And part of the reason email is becoming more important is that email and postal mail are not competitors. To reach your donors, get their attention, and move them to give, you need both!

Both is good

The Ideal Email Appeal

You have already seen the ideal appeal letter and the ideal thank-you letter on this blog. Now, I’d like to share what I consider to be the ideal email appeal. (Once again, I tip my hat to alert reader Joan Hill!)

From: Brendan Colthurst <[email protected]>
Date: Tue, Dec 29, 2020, 11:31 AM
Subject: You helped us tell stories no one else wants to tell
To: Joan Hill

Joan, I want to share a couple of important videos our video team here at RAICES made this year, acknowledge the importance of telling stories no one else is telling, and ask you for a donation of $65 to help make sure we can continue to tell these stories and fight for immigrant human rights.

BLACK IMMIGRANT LIVES

In the summer, one of our videos made a splash, with millions of views, tens of thousands of shares, and write-ups in major publications: Our Black Immigrant Lives are Under Attack video and accompanying article. In the video we lay out horrifying fact after horrifying fact about a US immigration system that is both terrorizing and undeniably worse for Black immigrants. We believe everyone needs to know what is happening to Black immigrants in the United States.

Black immigrant

DACA

On DACA, we brought you a series of videos to both explain the legal technicalities…

Defend DACA

…and to meet DACA recipients who have been caught in the crosshairs.

DACA recipients

CELEBRATING WINS

We celebrated a moment of pure joy watching Cameroonian asylum seeker Stephane reunite with his sister after a decade apart. Like the majority of asylum seekers, he was cruelly trapped in detention for months, even though his family was waiting for him with a safe home. Thankfully our RAICES Bond Program was able to get him out.

Asylum seeker

We believe that if all Americans truly knew how America treats its immigrant community members, they’d fight like hell for immigrant human rights just like we do. That’s why we tell the stories no one else is telling.

DONATE

Whether you are giving today, already support us, or are giving in other ways, thank you. Our mission requires solidarity, vigilance, and a strong community of supporters who stand up and fight whenever and wherever human rights abuses occur.

Thank you for standing with us,
Brendan Colthurst
Chief Technology Officer
RAICES

RAICESTEXAS.ORG

EIN 74-2436920

RAICES
1305 N. Flores
San Antonio, TX 78212
United States

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Why It Works

This email from RAICES does well at every turn.

  • The “From:” line tells you it’s in the name of a single, real person.
  • The “Subject:” line you that YOU made a real difference, and how. (It also promises stories, and everyone likes to hear those!)
  • Emotional language engages the reader.
  • The email asks for money early and often, so if Joan doesn’t end up reading the whole email she may still give.
  • The Donate links are prominent and visible.
  • The photos and videos break up the “wall of text” and add visual interest to keep the reader interested. And the links lead to pages that include a call to give to RAICES.

Could this email be a little on the long side? Perhaps–if Joan weren’t already a committed supporter.

But the nonprofit knew who Joan was–she’s in their database–and they pitched their appeal to her personally. I’d bet money they sent a different email to first-time donors, and a different one to prospects!

The Next Time You Ask, Use Email

If you are not asking for money by email yet, please take some tips from this example, and start! Don't give up on postal mail, because that would be a disaster for your bottom line. But using both, in tandem, would be ideal. Share on X

 

 

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TY Thursday: Thank Donors by Showing How to Discuss Issues

December 17, 2020 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

What did you discuss around the dinner table this Thanksgiving? Yes, in 2020 it had to be a Zoom dinner table, but some of the difficult issues that divide your family members might have cropped up anyway.

How did you discuss those issues? Did you use the mute button to shut up people you didn’t want to hear? Or did you sigh and wish you knew how to say something constructive back to them?

Now, suppose a nonprofit organization you had previously given a donation gave you great advice on what to say at that table. I know I would be grateful for that advice. When I was thinking about donations again at the end of the year, I would remember it. And your donors would, too–if you were that helpful organization.

A guide on how to discuss immigration

discuss immigrationRAICES always does a great job thanking donors, as we have seen before on this blog. My friend, nonprofit veteran Joan Hill, shared a thank-you letter that RAICES sent to her. It included this paragraph:

But the holidays can still bring up uncomfortable conversations that can be more challenging than usual this year. Many of us may be confronted with speaking up on behalf of those who continue fighting for their safety, like many in our immigrant communities.

We would like to support you in discussing issues close to your heart, like immigrant rights. Included in our thanks to you, we would like to share our Family Guide and an invitation to browse the RAICES Immigration and the Arts page highlighting the intersection between artistic expression and political action. Let this guide open the minds and hearts of conversations stuck in political rhetoric instead of the human impact.

The Family Guide is an easy download. Any donor who clicked on the link would find suggestions on how to discuss immigration issues with family members of all ages and all opinions.

That’s how RAICES is “giving back” to its donors–and at the same time, making them feel more grateful to RAICES. They’re rewarding generosity and creating loyalty at the same time.

What can your nonprofit do to help donors discuss the important issues that are the reason they gave to you in the first place? Whatever you can do, it will make them more likely to give again.

 

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Fundraising Tuesday: Ask, Often. Bill, Never

September 1, 2020 by Dennis Fischman Leave a Comment

When you get a bill in the mail or email for something you don’t remember buying, what do you do?

Do you just pay it? (I hope not.) Do you look into it? Or, do you make a note of who’s trying to defraud you, report them, and never get fooled again?

Nonprofits need to make sure their fundraising appeal doesn’t look like a bill

My good friend Joan Hill is a retired grantwriter and a generous person. Recently, she wrote to me:

Dear Dennis,

This is either

a)  an error

b)  the worst fundraising technique in the world, or

c)  a fraud

Plan to call the state Attorney General on Monday.  

Aargh!

Joan

The correct answer: c.)

It was a fraud.

But does your nonprofit’s appeal letter look like a fraud, too?

Here’s the bill that Joan received:

———- Forwarded message ———
From: [email protected] <[email protected]>
Date: Sat, Aug 15, 2020, 8:29 AM
Subject: Invoice from Fund for WHO COVID-19 Solidarity (0754)
To: Joan Hill …

 

WHO logo

Here’s your invoice

Fund for WHO COVID-19 Solidarity sent you an invoice for $50.00 USD

View and Pay Invoice

Due on receipt

The world has never faced a crisis like COVID-19. The pandemic is impacting communities everywhere. It’s never been more urgent to support the global response, led by the World Health Organization (WHO). Donations support WHO’s work, including with partners, to track and understand the spread of the virus; to ensure patients get the care they need and frontline workers get essential supplies and information; and to accelerate research and development of a vaccine and treatments for all who need them. Some donations also support additional Fund partners UNICEF, the World Food Programme, the UN’s refugee agency (UNHCR), the UN Relief and Works Agency for Palestine Refugees in the Near East (UNRWA), and the vaccine development alliance CEPI. Donors from Canada, China, Japan, or certain European countries, and the UK, may wish to give online to our Fund partners in these countries.

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Looks impressive, doesn’t it? And in fact, it is a real PayPal request–but it’s not a request from the World Health Organization, or anyone connected with the WHO.

Does your ask look like a bill, to the donor?

Knowing that scam artists like this are out there, legitimate nonprofits need to go the extra mile to obtain and retain the donor’s trust.

  • A real person should sign your direct mail, and a real person’s name should be used in the From: line of your email
  • When you are asking for money, make it clear: has this person supported you before? (In which case, thank them!) Or are you asking them for a first-time gift?
  • In either case, never, never, never make your ask look like a bill.

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